Early written plan of story


This post features the original story in which I was going to base my Children's book on. Despite the story being unfinished I decided to change and take a different approach to my Children's book as after I was reading through it and realised the story was too complex and really drawn out. The script below wouldn't be suitable enough for Children's book aimed between 0-5.

The unused script: 

Splosh and The New School

Page 1 - Front cover
Page 2 - Acknowledgements
Page 3 - Title
Page 4-5

FAMILY KITCHEN AND DINING ROOM – MORNING/DAYTIME

This is Splosh, it’s her first day of school today.
Splosh sat and ate her toast with butterflies in her tummy.
She was nervous and scared about where she was going.

‘Illustration of Splosh at the dining table, eating breakfast’

Once her toast was finished her mum called her to put on her wellies and get ready to leave.
Her knee’s wobbled, looking up to her mum with a frown and eyes of shock.

SPLOSH
Mummy, I don’t want to go to school.

‘Illustration of Splosh pulling onto her mum’s clothes from the view of the mother’

SPLOSH’S MOTHER
But you have to, Splosh.
It’s your first day, don’t be silly!

Splosh sighed and picked up her small bag filled with crayons, leaving the house with her mum.

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THE STREET – MORNING/DAYTIME

Splosh tugged onto her mum’s top and looked up to her mum again.

SPLOSH
Mummy, I don’t feel well…
I can’t go to school now

SPLOSH’S MOTHER
Come on, we’re nearly there now. You’ll enjoy it when we get there.

‘Illustration of Splosh and her mother approaching the school in the distance’

Splosh started to sniffle, her frown bigger and larger as single tear drop fell from her eye

Splosh’s mother picked up Splosh and put her in her arms.

SPLOSH’S MOTHER
Don’t worry, you’ll get to make a lot of new friends when you’re there and you’ll be able to draw there as well.

‘Illustration of Splosh in her mother’s arms as Splosh’s Mother wipes her tears away’

Splosh smiled for a moment, she loved to draw and so carried on walking to school with her mother to the school.

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THE SCHOOL ENTRANCE – MORNING/DAYTIME

SPLOSH’S MUM
Here we are, I’ll be back at three to collect you

As Splosh and her mum reached the school, Splosh’s teacher stood at the gate.

‘Illustration of Splosh and her mother closing in on the gate of the school as her teacher stands close to the gate’

Splosh looked at her mum one last time.

SPLOSH
Please don’t let me go, I don’t like school!

In flash, Splosh hid behind her mother, looking to the side of her in curiosity and red in the face.

The teacher smiled and walked up to Splosh and her mother.

Splosh quickly hid her face; she didn’t want to go to school.

‘Illustration of Splosh hiding behind her mother’



Page 10-11


Page 12-13


Page 14


Page 15


Page 16 – Back Cover

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